- My peers might see me trying to affirm Williams’ identity change pattern, however thy might also see me challenge it. I agree with his identity change pattern of a student starting their narrative off in a negative light, and then moving into a positive one. I am attempting to challenge that there is more to it than that. His pattern may work for some students, but it is not found throughout all students who undergo an identity shift.
- In my rough draft, my peers think I did a good job introducing the sources into my introductory paragraph. That was something they noted that I had done well. My peers however did feel as though I had a little too much summary for the introduction of my literacy narratives at times.
- I need to trim down on some of my summary and dive deeper into my analysis. I have strong evidence, as far as my quotes go, but I need to explain them more in depth. This will help the reader to understand more of my ideas than a summary of other’s ideas.
